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How Life Leads Love by ~Alisonia:iconAlisonia:





How Life Leads Love


I saw you last night.

It’s been so long,
but in the crowd, after all my searching
I recognized you.
Conflicted screams came out as whispers,
aching to be close, stumbling forward,
     Relief
flooding as I saw your eyes connect with mine and there was
     Recognition.

     Exhaustion.

I wanted to lay my head against your neck and heal
my tired, unforgiving body.
I needed solace, closure
(will it ever be found?)

Beneath my eyelids I could
     Smell
you and nothing had changed;
     Trace
my hands over every little imperfection on your perfect body,
your bumps and grooves and swirls
were imprinted in my brain;
     Run
my hands through your hair
the familiar fibers that I so often held;
     Imagine
things we could do together and
     Remember
what we once had.

That look you gave me
your eyes
the softly spoken unwritten words,
gave me warmth and solace
     Completion.

The sparrows sang us a melody
humble and sweet
     Enticing
daylight to come through and drape shadows over us.

I awoke
tangled in morning sun-stained cotton,
my head on a wet pillow,
     Alone.
  

  
© Alison Cornellier
©2005-2009 ~Alisonia
:iconalisonia:

Author's Comments

I thought I had all those emotions taken care of...until last night...


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Edit: poem entered in the Knock Out Tournament

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:iconmirotf:
wow! great peom...

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sana pelikula na lang ang buhay
:iconalisonia:
Oh wow, thanks for stopping for the read.

:)
:iconrockstarvanity:
Awww my god, that's so sad. I love 'sun-stained'. That is an absolutely brilliant expression, and so true. I hate that waking up after a dream and it being the morning, even though it feels like it should still be dark and everything looks dirty cause you can see it clearly. It so horrible having feelings like that about something, that you don't love them any more or want to be with them, but you never got a clean break so you still ache for one. I had to ask David not to use a certain brand of hair products cause an ex of mine used to use that brand and when I woke up in the middle of the night and smelled it I got all freaked out.

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tanya simpson
rockstarvanity@volunteers.deviantart.com
gallery moderator, horror + macabre photography

welcome to the dark side
kick-start your horror art here . . .
:iconcaeruleus-flamma:
again I love the typography =) I haavee to learn how to do that some time...
I loooovvee 'tangled in morning sun-stained cotton,' ' I needed solace, closure
(will it ever be found?)' amazinggg poem againnn

--
I am me, no I am me, no I am me
:iconthoughtfox:
The last stanza is brilliant, it paints such an emotional picture.

--
"Lost in time and lost in space........and meaning."
:iconthemainliner:
I really like this Alison, but one line jarred, I think you might consider just excising it:

'(will it ever be found?)' (mybe it's just the parentheses I don't like, not sure?)

Unnecessary in an otherwise 'perfect' piece. I really liked this "...your bumps and grooves and swirls
were imprinted in my brain...".

Top job, AC.

--
"…No, your drinking’s not up to journalism and neither, probably, is your writing. Stick to criticism mate, you don’t have to be able to drink or write."

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:iconalisonia:
I can definitely see where you're coming from. But, don't you think that once you think you've found solace, but then one day discover that you never fully healed, that it jars and hurts you?

I think that I was trying to put some kind of emphasis on that line, that the discovery of self-healing will never be found, that the wound is always open and sore, some days more than others.

Do you think italics would work better there?

Thanks so much for a lovely & wonderful comment.

Ali
:iconalisonia:
Oh thank you, I wrote this after a dream I had the night before. I realized I was still not 100% over him.
:iconalisonia:
Oh thank you!
I re-read the poem after my initial writing, and I loved the indented lines, how each word described something that had occured in my dream....
Thanks for your kind words of encouragement.
Ali

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